Stronger Advice

• Consistently use terminology. You can use pronouns and contracted forms, but don't switch terminology.
• Similarly, consistently capitalize.
• Introduce acronyms (e.g. Cell Assemblies (CAs)), and then you can use them.
• Use sections and subsections.
• Check your grammar and your word usage. (At least use Word for this.)
• Get a native speaker to proof read.
• Make sure that ideas are introduced and followed.
• Cite to provide evidence.